Frage von PowerMac:
A preview for the Slashcam forum. As proof that we want to learn, good people. What do you notice? We are looking for improvement.
Antwort von kartoffelpuffer:
the small zooms in the post or made?
Antwort von domain:
In my opinion, become good if you like the little stupid grinning father. And another thing, the video suggests a local and temporal unity. But the woman goes into a very short time twice their outer garments (brown shirt, jeans jacket)
Antwort von PowerMac:
This is their daughter.
Antwort von Frank B.:
Beautifully made short - how it is already much better.
I'd hammer out something not so good. But if you ask for criticism, I feel the last shot of the woman before the house comes into view too much. The attitudes of many seem somewhat nervous. If one were to take out the last shot of the mother, that would be a better transition. The father lifts his eyes - as you see the next house with solar roof. The mother is indeed previously been shown. Also quoted in my opinion it would fit better. The sentence: "Up to 8% return ..." starts with the picture of the mother, which I think is unfortunate. I would consider it successful if we were to see the roof even for a moment, I am so ever could mentally adjust to what it is at the rate of return is about. The fact that this commercial advertises solar roofs will only just with this first picture of the house clear.
You notice, I speak a lot of emotions. I can not express it differently, because I have neither the expertise filmakers.
Oh yes, mother and daughter look so similar that you could say it's a person. I went on the first viewing (in the other thread) synonymous Sun The irritate me.
Antwort von Korbi:
with me he does not like that, but you have to decide as to makers know best and some.
but that my opinion does not even go to the first is cut.
Antwort von pilskopf:
I find most the baby too hectic in the first scene, I would reduce the number of frames, so the end could have taken out some movement to the next section looks soft. That's it.
The final still irritates me, "can make all current" - is missing for me as a "synonymous them." But Does not matter. Good collectively.
Antwort von DWUA:
From ~ 0:28
is not really a "final image". Although the focus shift indicates
on what is meant, the overlap with the heads of the rear roof view
seems rushed. One wishes at last becoming a full
Picture (the very best) of the plant ...
... Before the company's name appears.
Maybe swap only the last two settings?
Try (?)
Antwort von pilskopf:
I would like less Alias | Wavefront Mayaing do. : D Hopefully the 7D will soon retire.
Antwort von PowerMac:
Let's see what the Anti-Alias | Wavefront Mayaing from Final Cut Studio hinkriegt yet ...
Antwort von NEEL:
Reactio Shot! After 28 'Cut to the faces of the family. Ifs that goes well, the customer is willing. With Dentagard-laugh (and trial cash signs in their eyes, with cash register ringing highlighted:).
Otherwise, much better.
Antwort von DWUA:
Otherwise, much better. Much better than what?
Antwort von Frank B.:
Much better than
that .
Enjoy reading;)
Antwort von Pianist:
Much better than what? Was this century by thread about s.Dir? :-)
Matthias
Antwort von 7nic:
Much better than that .
Enjoy reading;) I would say:
What else but
that .
Antwort von Frank B.:
@ Nic
Yes, that's synonymous.
Antwort von DWUA:
Same problem - different question.
Some seem to be overwhelmed with it.
;))
Antwort von shipoffools:
...
Maybe swap only the last two settings?
... I think that one must even change these settings. The question is: What setting is set then make the "family setting"?
The images, narration and music do not seem somehow "go together", work on me rather restless and inconsistent.
The rhythm section does not please me. Especially with this music (tick - tock - ...) I think it is necessarily the cuts to the beat / meter set.
Antwort von Frank B.:
Habs me now, hach previous reviews, a few views. I think synonymous similar Korbi, the first picture (mother's arms and aircraft) should all get out, then enter the same with the daughter and the flight model.
Also, the discomfort of some speakers at the end of the film I can understand. As a final scene with the house system, running in the writing of the company would really be better. The family then before (exchange final scenes), with the focus shifting to me not to back of the head of the family likes. Does not say over. Here I would like to have again seen the (poor) faces of the family.
To my comments above, I still am.
Antwort von 7nic:
Nervous?
Hmmm. This feeling came in me does not. But very interesting that it works on several so ...
Antwort von Frank B.:
Nervous? Apparently the clip has more because of its quiet cutting dimension and its balanced characteristic style, but this is disturbed by some things. I can describe it bad, but feel Sun The times you should pursue as professionals. It may be that the child is too fast in his movements, as next head pils wrote above. Sure synonymous play some sections that do not harmonize well with pure.
Antwort von r.p.television:
The resemblance between mother and daughter is not a problem. At least I recognized it immediately as two different people.
The baby: Even if such a statement is unpopular: From advertising aesthetics compatible you can not talk, unfortunately. But since you had to take what was probably (probably baby of employees, relatives, etc.) - because we can not say we do not like the baby.
The last shot: Would I run backwards - almost to that "on its roof, the roof is synonymous sharp.
The speaker is almost a little too late, because he has the first few seconds of something out of place, because it completely changes the atmosphere. The visual and listening habits in short spots with more restrained music dictates a very uniform background. Since, the speakers will be very early on.
The Kadrage like the mother I personally am not so much. Too much headroom and horizontal synonymous not to my taste.
But all bitching at a higher level.
Otherwise, the matter has been quite round.
Antwort von domain:
Hehe. Now I have synonymous recognized that women are actually two different people. Look more like sisters without clearly visible generation gap.
Start with the Frequently quadricopter be held in one hand, while the second s.der RC control is increased the pitch and after take-off the first hand quickly used for advanced control of the aircraft.
The idea that the quadricopter start of the hand of the mother, I would not come. I also understand the meaning all, why is only minimal power-consuming device used as an example.
Since there are so very different real energy guzzlers in the Budget that would have been but probably not as effective to bring into the picture.
An electric bike would be there probably still have been a better example, or better yet an unattended automatic lawnmower that runs on battery discharge synonymous independently to the charging station to recharge itself.
